As promised I said I’d follow up with focusing the scene on the interplay to two characters. Notice I’m focusing on the dialogue it’s self so there’s not much in terms of detail.
“Explain Y,” demanded X drumming his fingers on the table.
“I’m not certain I can explain,” sighed Y.
“Can’t or won’t?” questioned X.
“The documents you have are fairly explanatory of themselves.” dug in Y.
A rumble of grumbles filled the room from those gathered for the interview. Y glanced away from X taking in the annoyed expression on A. B scowled into her coffee mug. X rapped on the table drawing Y’s attention back to him.
“Fine, let’s go back to the very beginning.” X ordered flipping the screen to a the first page of the documents.
The focus is on Y’s conversation with X but the other characters actions provide some insight to the reactions to the conversation. Only a couple side characters are highlighted.
What do you think? Is it more interesting? Does the tension feel higher?
Camile Grant 
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